K, here’s the plan

Step 1: Start shopping the books (you’ll find their synopses on this page, and you can read bits and pieces of them if you ask me for the password) around agents and maybe publishers. (Well, start shopping the first one anyway. Try finishing the second, and polishing the third and fourth.) Yes, I want to be Published. Sosumi.

Step 2: Rework the opening so it doesn’t let go. It wasn’t bad before but in this day of punchy internet writing–

Step 3: Post a sample of the new opening on blog for feedback. Yes, from you. I’ll leave it there for a while — say a week — and then, poof.

Feedback not only welcome. Feedback actively sought.

Cheers.

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2 thoughts on “K, here’s the plan

  1. For the start of a book? I like the writing style, the description. I assume we’re going to be meeting these people again as someone explores why these (Haitian) people wanted to shoot this man. This is a sort of preface, yes?

    For the start of a submission? You’re giving us a POV of a man who’s about to die, commenting on his murderers – where’s Jazz? Where’s the investigators? Where’s the Bahamas? I think you might be leading with the wrong scene here, when it comes to pitching for agents/publishers.

    Now go and prove me wrong by selling the book and becoming as fabulously successful as JKR!

  2. This is a sort of preface, yes?

    Yes. The idea in this series is that each novel starts with the POV of the main/first victim. Sort of a theme. So no Jazz, etc, but they appear in Chapter II.

    You’re giving us a POV of a man who’s about to die, commenting on his murderers – where’s Jazz? Where’s the investigators? Where’s the Bahamas? I think you might be leading with the wrong scene here, when it comes to pitching for agents/publishers.

    This is what I need to hear — thanks. This is an opening that hasn’t been sent anywhere. The actual opening was different, still starting with the victim, and it does introduce Jazz at some point. The first five pages should get Jazz, the Bahamas, etc, in.

    Thing is, the openings of the other books are far punchier than the one I ended up with for the first. The first was rough, largely because I was returning to prose fiction after too many years of academic writing. I’ve edited the life out of it. I tried to get some life back.

    Thanks, thanks, thanks! And I’m off to do your meme. I haven’t commented on your blog because Blogger has made it so damn difficult …

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