NaPoReMo – June 7

Dragonfly

I’ve been contemplating my dislike of “In the Red Seats” — which I am convinced has to do with the application of modifiers — and wondering whether I’m not being more judgemental, more rigid, than I need to be, whether I’m not applying workshop platitudes in a place where they do not belong.

I’m not sure about that. The adjectives added little to that poem. Here, though Hudgins’ adjectives work.

Perhaps it’s because they have a purpose, a context, which lets them work.

Consider:

Book says “most predacious.” Book
says “fastest
…………………..flying insect,” says
it eats its body weight in half an hour.
Mother called it
……………………..the devil’s
darning needle. Book
…………………………….adds “darner”
and “devil’s arrow.” Mother said
it stitches shut the eyes,
……………………………..ears, lips
of sleeping children …

and

…………………………..damselfly
that strafes the pond clabber, soars,
swoops,
……………hovers, sideslips, loops
…………………………………………….and twists,
sunlight revealing a new glint
of iridiscent
…………………….shimmer — purple, red,
green, turquoise, gold, gunmetal blue —
with every pass.

Every one of the adjectives has a purpose. This is what I’m looking for from Hudgins and his poems. This one I like.

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